Severe Weather…Again
24 Feb 2012 7 Comments
in Poetry Tags: driving, freeverse, Poetry, Queensland, rain, storms, weather, zeus
Tantrums of rain slap the windscreen
wipers punish the squall with little effect
white line fever vanishes in the mist
of the torrential sob of a day
oncoming beacons, sparkle through the spray
keeping me onside… but nerves
navigate another course
while the river caresses the underbelly
of a low lying bridge with false sincerity
moist sideswipes grow more intense
as nature gains an upper hand
against the structure of man
oh let these clouds lay their fluffy blubber
upon this land
unleashing the tears of a snivelling Zeus
great philandering god of weather
may you blunt your lightning rod
on Mt Beerburrum
and fizzle into a sun shower
so I may drive a rainbow home.
Feb 24, 2012 @ 14:15:22
We’ve got some frozen precipitation today. Stay dry. No flooding!
Feb 25, 2012 @ 11:05:50
I love the expression of nerves navigating another course. And then this:-
while the river caresses the underbelly
of a low lying bridge with false sincerity
There is much startling imagery here. A very strong poem indeed.
Feb 29, 2012 @ 03:22:01
smiles…driving a rainbow home would be nice…a little hope there…smiles…i have been in those storms driving when i just clung white knuckled and hoped no one stopped in front of me….great use of language in this…starting with the tantrum
Feb 29, 2012 @ 03:41:12
Most of the poems I have read today have been about the weather, so I think it is pre-eminent in people’s minds. This delightful piece captures a great deal. I love the beginning: ‘Tantrums of rain slap the windscreen’ How stunning! Nature does gain the upper hand in the end in spite of all of man’s efforts. Beautiful portrayal here.
Feb 29, 2012 @ 23:11:42
what a fantastic last line. and i also really liked white line fever. very nice write.
Mar 01, 2012 @ 02:54:27
Nicely done, love the last line !
Mar 04, 2012 @ 05:37:41
I’d like to drive a rainbow home. Wonderful line. Beautiful poem.
Jamie Dedes