Agitato wind
composes bitter notes upon the day
fresh grey bites skipping across the water
gnashing on the air
I touch his cold cheek
lean into his slowing heart
fermata eye closes
and his second thought
beautiful
calando
a gentle silver whisper in my ear
tips his hat
and blows on by
leaving rain crystals calling my name softly
as they fall
upon my face
for dverse poets Meeting the bar: synesthesia
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“and his second thought
beautiful
calando”
Dianne, that is beautiful. Lovely poem throughout.
Pamela
my goodness his thoughts are big words….ha…smiles…i do like me a silver whisper though…a nice tender embrace for a second there…the crystal rain calling your name is cool too…
This is SO beautiful!
i like how you use the musical terminology
You hit a home run for me with this one, Di, as I love to read poetry that draws on music and you used it so well for the prompt.
I touch his cold cheek
lean into his slowing heart
Absolutely haunting. A fine piece here written. -Mike
Wonderful, with a such a sweet autumn touch… sigh… Really really good… Love the agitato wind
Beautifully done, Diane! I especially love the “silver whisper”. Nice!
Oh, this is beautiful, Diane. So many wonderful examples of synesthesia. I really like ‘ran crystals calling my name softly’ and ‘fermata eye closes.’
A creative response to music ~ I like this part: leaving rain crystals calling my name softly
Beautiful work Di ~
love how you connect nature,music and emotions and compose such a beautiful melody with it..
Wow – this SO lovely!
..soothing! smiles…
“rain crystals calling my name softly
as they fall
upon my face”
The whole poem is beautiful, but I love these lines most of all 🙂
Oh! very nice and very calm too, soothing actually! flowing with the verses, line by line!